As I was writing a sex scene today, I was reminded of:
a) how difficult it is to write this kind of scene without being creepy or porny, and
b) my favorite sex scene in all of literature, from Elect Mr. Robinson for a Better World by Donald Antrim, which is funny, and almost all dialogue.
Here’s the heart of Antrim’s scene, for your reading pleasure:
“Ah,” she said into my mouth.
“Ah,” I breathed back.
“Ah.”
“Ah.”
“Yeah.”
“Yeah.”
“Hmn?”
“Yeah.”
“How?”
“Slow.”
“Mn.”
“Ah.”
“Mn.”
“Oh.”
“Mn.”
“Easy.”
“Sorry.”
“No. Good. Great. Just not yet.”
“Sure?”
“Yes. No.”
“Turn me over.”
“Yeah?”
“Yeah.”
“Yes?”
“Yes, yes.”
“Doesn’t hurt?”
“No.”
“Sure?”
“Sure.”
“Tell me if.”
“No, no, good.”
“Yeah?”
“Yeah.”
“Yeah?”
“Ah, no, ouch.”
“Sorry.”
“Okay.”
“Mmn?”
“Mmn.”
“Yeah?”
“Yeah.”
“Ah,” I breathed.
“Ah.”
